Blog for Week of October 14th

 There wasn't a whole lot of new content this week, and the one thing that we did cover, the Inca Garcilaso commentaries, I already covered in last week's post. It was quite the experience working on my first paper for college. I was managed my time pretty well in writing my paper, but there are some things I can still improve for the next one. The first thing that I think I need to work on is incorporating more sources. It's not necessarily a bad thing to have lots of solid information from one or two sources, but my arguments would be even stronger if I could connect additional sources together. Another thing that I personally struggle with is sentence structure. I always feel like I'm repeating myself or using the same syntax, so I enjoyed doing the peer editing. The peer editing was really helpful because I realized incorporating a little bit more information could add to my paper. Another reason why I enjoyed the peer editing was that I got to see a completely different perspective on the same paper topic. Maddie's paper included tons of different information that I hadn't even thought about using previously. We both took a very different approach in our sources, so we ended up learning a lot about each other's unique writing styles and thought processes through the papers.

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  1. Angela Van HornOctober 15, 2021 at 11:11 AM

    Hey Ben! I definitely agree that this paper has let me learn a lot about my writing style and that I know carry tips and tricks I can use on my next paper. I also think that I had some trouble incorporating sources and getting my different sources to connect to each other. The peer editing for me was very helpful as well because I found that other classmates had a lot of tips that helped me and a lot of suggestions on things that I could add to my paper that I hadn't even thought about.

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